Hi, sabbykat.
1) I'm not sure you're allowed to use iframes in listings.
2) Too much text! See earlier advice I've given.
3) Not enough design. See earlier advice.
4) Don't say that the photos don't do it justice. That sounds like salesman-y words. And who wants to read that. I want to see a picture of exactly what this is, and I want to get excited. If the photos don't do it justice, please take better photos!
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